Workshop 2 - Inside Out

Linking themes to the impact of Angles, Movement, and Shots. 

Brainstorm: 

What's happening - Wybie standing on stairs outside the house. O. Mother asks him to smile from the doorway, instead, he frowns. 

 - O. Wybie making himself smaller, less of a target, head down, shoulders hunched. Looks week and vulnerable 

Angles/Shot - High angle - Makes Wybie look overpowered, weak and vulnerable 

 - POV - Other mothers make her seem stronger, bigger, more dominant. 

Viewer - makes the viewer feel sorry for / scared for O. Wybie. 

Directer - Hinting at what is it to come. 

              - Hinting that maybe the O. Mother isn't so wonderful. 

Other Techniques - 

 Lighting - Spotlight on Wybie - like he's on the spot / under forces. 

    - Dark around creates a creepy atmosphere. 

In the scene with the O. mother and the O. Wybie, we see high angle shots used to show the theme of 'looks can be deceiving'. We see this when the O. mother asks O. Wybie to smile but he hunches over and frowns instead. This makes the audience feel sorry for the O. Wybie because he looks scared. The use of this high angle shot from the perspective of the O. mother adds to this feeling as it makes the O. mother look weak and vulnerable. The director did this to foreshadow the change. 

My Writing

The year of writing

Today I am looking at my progress in writing. Here is a piece of writing that I'm not very amazed with.

One day there once lived a dog in a small house on a small street with blowing howling trees the sway in the wind. This day Clicky became famous. She was living with her owners Parker and Diana. It was Tuesday morning and Clicky was really excited *yelp yelp* she went, Parker and Diana took her to the park where they would do tricks and try to win. They finally arrived moaned Parker *yelp yelp* said Clicky.

They were practicing in the tunnel “JUMP said Diana” *Clicky Jumped so high she fell and broke her left leg. *yelp yelp awwww* Parker runs to clicky are you ok Parker takes Clicky to the vet down near the shops.

They find out the horrible news, Clicky has broken her leg and fractured her knee said the vet. Unfortunately she can't participate in the show. *yelp yelp Clicky cries* It’s ok Clicky you are going to do the show not using that left le of yours let’s go practice said Parker. She drove her back to the dog park so she could practice and she did amazing.

It was now her time to perform off you go Clicky you will do well. *JUMP Clicky* well done Clicky, *CLICKY ROLL OVER* Awesome here is a treat. And the last act Clicky do your dance. Clicky does her dance and everyone went wild, “that dog can really dance” And that day on Clicky became famous… Story continues

One year later

One day Clicky got sick and had to be put down, Parker did not like the fact of that so he made the spare room into a lab for animals so if they were sick he could cure them and make them living creatures again.

So with this writing I used descriptive words But I could have used better words to help in my

Now here is a good piece of writing that I am proud of:

Uncle in the derby

It was a Saturday Morning I had to get up and get ready for rugby.

We were at home getting ready to go to woodford glen. It was only 2:30 so we went to uncle Craig’s to spray paint our names on the car.

We arrived at woodford glen we sat down and played tag while we waited for it to start. YAY it started, we sat down and watch the practice then the grand parade. While the grand parade was going on they chucked lollies we tried to get them all but no we didn’t.

The cars had come out to line up they were really loud and flicked lots of clay, More races had come while  it got darker and darker. It was nearly finished but before it could finish we had to see the derby in fact there was two, the first derby was teamed, the cars came out it was 5 canterbury v.s 4 otago then it was the ramp derby Uncle Craig was still in the race 3 of his team cars had spun out so it was only him and his team mate left he had spun out just at the race was up.

We had so much fun watching him and he sure did do well.

In this one I think that have made it so that sounds better and has good punctuation in places.

Please have a read and comment things that you think I need to work on it will a great help.

Letter

My letter from 2 Wheeled spanky 

Today I received a letter from my friend 2 Wheeled Spanky. This letter was telling me about how much my bike means to me here is the letter I received:

A letter to my old friend

Dear Jasmine

I like how  you ride me, I like how you treat me like i'm your best friend. Maybe could you clean me and ride me more often. I really enjoyed the first day when I meet you and we went for the best bike ride ever.  One day we are going to go on an adventure together in a forest with a bike track sounds cool hope you use me more often.

 

From 2 Wheeled Spanky

Name Jasmine

As you know my letter came from my bike. blog ya later

The water cycle

Water Cycle experiment 

Kia ora today I'm posting about an experiment that we did in writing. The experiment is called the Water Cycle. Here are the instructions for this experiment, try it.

A small bowl

A large bowl

Gladwrap

Salt

Weight

Hot boiling water

  Have fun

Step 1. Get a large bowl.

Step 2. Put some hot boiling water into the large bowl.

Step 3. Put the small bowl directly in the centre of the large bowl

Step 4. Put some salt in large bowl. [if you want to]

Step 5. Glad Wrap the large bowl.

Step 6. Put weight in the centre of the bowl in the middle of the small bowl. [use an apple]

Step 7. Wait a good 30 minutes

The water hits the glad wrap and condenses and runs into the small bowl.

:) I hope you have enjoyed my post blog ya later :)

Port hills fire

Port Hills Fire - Recount

Kia ora and welcome to my blog today I am sharing my Port Hills Fire Recount. The purpose of my writing today is to entertain people with my writing.

This is it in action

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                                                                                               This is the fire now

When my mum and I were in the mall getting the shopping done for school , My mums phone went off “ding ding” I checked it for her it said “ Go have a look outside and look at the sky it looks like a fire” mum said come on then we will hurry to have a look . We had finally finished we packed the stuff and then there it was black smoke and red hot burning blaze ahead from where i was standing. We jumped into the car and and went the long way home to have a look on the way we seen redness around the smoke, I felt really sorry for the people who lived there.

We got home and my sisters did not even let me and mum get inside they were like did you see the fire. I replied “ yes help get the shopping inside”. While we were getting the shopping in, the news started I ran in there and paused it so we could listen and watch it so see what was going on.

After the news was finished the girls went to bed while I was cleaning the backyard, I was cleaning the back yard so that Mum could mow the lawns and put the sprinkler out on the grass. We did not want to out grass to light on fire because of how DRY  our grass was. I had done the lawns and then went inside to watch tv. After one program we went outside and had a look it still looked the same, so we went back inside and watched the other 2 programs. After that it was 9:00pm I went out and had a look it looked like the sky was changing color. Wow I said I had never seen something so crazy. I got into my pjs and set off to bed.

It was the next day I had jump out of bed and ran to the back door to see if the fire had been put out or if it was still burning had a feeling it was still burning and it was :(. I had gone to school and everyone could see it on the field. A week later… The fire had been put it yay what a relief but the people who lived in the port hills was still not aloud to go into their homes.

That is my writing for now. Do you think that my story was entertain or not? What do you think would make my story sound better.

Story time

The Day Tom Starts School 

Once upon a time there lived a little boy called tom he lives with his parents and his 2 year old sister. It was the 2cd of february and it was the day he started school he was really existed he was bouncing around he had his breakfast and got his bag and went to the bus  stop with his mum and his sister Naomi. They got to the bus stop and he jumped on the bus and gave the bus driver sally a big smile. He sat next to Timmy his best friend and said bye to Mum. He arrived a school jumped off the bus and fell over, they called his mum and his mum came straight away. She took him to the doctors and he had broken his left leg he got a cast put on it and then he got to go back to school he was in crushers he was really wobbly on them so he got a wheelchair then he wheeled into the class his class was really surprised. He started felling sore so he went home and then he had a ice-cream on the way home. He got home and then he stared felling good again. 

The end of the story this is just a story I made in my head.

Online typing

Typing Online

here is a keyboard

In Rimu we are doing a thing online for our online typing it's so that we can practice typing faster not just on our chromebooks for other types of devices too. I like doing this activity because it actually helping me. In Rimu we are doing a thing online for our online typing it's so that we can practice typing faster not just on our chromebooks for other types of devices too. I like doing this activity because it actually helping me. Here is a screenshot of my work.

click here to go to typing school

My next step will be to try an ace some more levels by practicing.

Blog commets

Blog Comments Before and Af

For the last few weeks we have been learning to write quality blog comments witch means writing blog comments on bnlogs all around the schools in hormby cluster. Here is my blog comments before and after.

before- 

In this blog comment I have not used the right punctuation in the right places and have not used the key three.

After

In this blog comment I have uesd punctuation in the right places and I have used the key three.

In the last few weeks I have learnd to write a quality blog comment and to use the key three through out my writing .

The key three is: 

content  - start = capital

structure - end = punctaution 

quality - names = capital