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Tuesday, September 6, 2016

Ski trip

Ski Trip Screencastify

Last week on Tuesday the senior hub of Gilberthorpe School went skiing at Mount Hutt, It was really fun. On Wednesday the day after the ski trip we had to make a recount of what we did and were we went we also had to screencastify our recount. Here is my recount screencastify I hope you like It.

I like this  piece of writing because this is a good example how to use adjectives, adverbs and verbs.

My next step is to: Use more language features like: Onomatopoeia and alliteration to make my writing a bit more interesting.

5 comments:

  1. Kia ora Jasmine.
    Thanks for sharing this. I like being able to see and hear your writing. Great next step with how to make your writing more interesting. I'm looking forward to seeing your next piece of writing.

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  2. Hi Jaz Milan here. I enjoyed the part when you was talking about the magic carpet and what it is. Did you think about what you where going to say.I like how you make sure what word you was going to say next it was really hard when you had to look at the screen and then you had to look at the word. Well that was really good how you made expresions and made funny faces. Se ya later in real life.

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    1. Kia ora Milan.
      Thank you for this thoughtful comment I love getting comments from kids around the world and at Gilberthorpe school.

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